Friends

Shrimp · Subject: Friends Wed Mar 18, 2009 12:41 am

I seem to be developing my poem writing ability Happy

And, I have wrote my first happy poem, so I thought you all might like to read it, Excited/Very Happy

Friends

I love you all so much
Even when you embarrass me
Or out smart me
And make me feel dumb

I love you all so
Sometimes you take a joke too far
But what is a joke amongst friends
Like water under a bridge

I love you all so
Even when you worry so much
About things that would never happen
I listen to you, and give my piece of advice

I just want you all to know,
I love you all so much, forever....

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Go on, go on
Just walk away
Go on, go on
Your choice is made
Go on, go on
And disappear
Go on, go on
Away from here

16/8/2008 + 21/05/2009 = two of the best days ever Excited/Very Happy

MrsDeathCARRs · Subject: Re: Friends Wed Mar 18, 2009 12:54 am

Gemma I love it so much Excited/Very Happy

:D

I nearly cried, it's so beautifully written

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Shrimp · Subject: Re: Friends Wed Mar 18, 2009 12:57 am

I know you do, you were first to read it, before it was on here lol
Awwww, I nearly cried at your reply to it on MSN :')

By the way, does it seem like each stanza is sorta about a specific friend?
Because I noticed it kinda does, but that may just be me because I wrote it Laughing

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Go on, go on
Just walk away
Go on, go on
Your choice is made
Go on, go on
And disappear
Go on, go on
Away from here

16/8/2008 + 21/05/2009 = two of the best days ever Excited/Very Happy

Something.Less.Rude · Subject: Re: Friends Wed Mar 18, 2009 5:10 pm

Wow, that's how I was feeling yesterday,
I really can connect with the emotion in the poem
it's lovely tbh

I felt that way towards my friends yesterday
I tried to some it up in 140 characters on facebook
but failed,
Max commented on it actually
it's lovely lol Happy

Starom · Subject: Re: Friends Thu Mar 19, 2009 11:07 pm

Awh, it's really good ^^ Happy

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Shrimp · Subject: Re: Friends Thu Mar 19, 2009 11:57 pm

Thanks ^^

Though I am starting to wonder if I could have done better

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Go on, go on
Just walk away
Go on, go on
Your choice is made
Go on, go on
And disappear
Go on, go on
Away from here

16/8/2008 + 21/05/2009 = two of the best days ever Excited/Very Happy

MrsDeathCARRs · Subject: Re: Friends Sat Mar 21, 2009 2:48 pm

I think it's amazing as it is. What would you change about it?

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Shrimp · Subject: Re: Friends Sat Mar 21, 2009 2:51 pm

I don't know, I just wonder if I really tried if I could just make a better attempt, and make it seem less specific

after all it's not meant to be XD

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Go on, go on
Just walk away
Go on, go on
Your choice is made
Go on, go on
And disappear
Go on, go on
Away from here

16/8/2008 + 21/05/2009 = two of the best days ever Excited/Very Happy

MrsDeathCARRs · Subject: Re: Friends Sat Mar 21, 2009 3:00 pm

I guess you could have a go at re-writing if you want.

Maybe write another one on the same theme, though? Coz I really do think this is brilliant Excited/Very Happy

:D

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Shrimp · Subject: Re: Friends Sat Mar 21, 2009 3:02 pm

I guess I could write another, but I don't feel inspired to write anything at the moment, I guess I wil write another one some day Laughing

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Go on, go on
Just walk away
Go on, go on
Your choice is made
Go on, go on
And disappear
Go on, go on
Away from here

16/8/2008 + 21/05/2009 = two of the best days ever Excited/Very Happy

MrsDeathCARRs · Subject: Re: Friends Sat Mar 21, 2009 3:08 pm

onel

Sorry couldn't resist given the current MSN convo Tounge Out

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Anyways yeh inspiration comes when you least expect it Laughing

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Shrimp · Subject: Re: Friends Sat Mar 21, 2009 3:23 pm

Atleast I didn't typo a typo Tounge Out

Pretty much, when I'm next happier than usual I might get some inspiration as that was when I got inspiration for that one Happy

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Go on, go on
Just walk away
Go on, go on
Your choice is made
Go on, go on
And disappear
Go on, go on
Away from here

16/8/2008 + 21/05/2009 = two of the best days ever Excited/Very Happy

MrsDeathCARRs · Subject: Re: Friends Sat Mar 21, 2009 5:38 pm

I love the new one you've wrote...

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